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Intro for a Tennis Management Game
« on: November 23, 2009, 04:43:27 AM »
Been thinking about an intro to be placed on the homepage:

These are the two options.
A game that puts you incharge of the development of your own tennis player academy. You control players from their training upto determining how they play their matches. Manage your players careers as they play in their local leagues as well as in Grand Slams. Are you game?

Join a game that puts you in charge of your own tennis academy. You manage the career of tennis players and attempt to create the future stars. Train your players, determine how they play against opponents while you compete against the best managers from around the world.

Please feel free to let me know your comments and / or suggest a rewrite.

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Re: Intro for a Tennis Management Game
« Reply #1 on: November 23, 2009, 05:13:38 AM »
For some reason I like the second version much more.

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Re: Intro for a Tennis Management Game
« Reply #2 on: November 23, 2009, 05:18:19 AM »
:)

Thanks, I had the first one drafted around a month back and the second one was drafted today. Its not much, but I think its better than the first one too.

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Re: Intro for a Tennis Management Game
« Reply #3 on: November 23, 2009, 10:34:06 AM »
For some reason I like the second version much more.

Agreed.

 


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